"Very enticing, captivating, well paced, length, clear well done. This story got me engaged, to feel I wanted to hear more, couldn't wait for the outcome. Simple story easy to follow. Use of using not only visualisation, feeling, emotion, smell of the horse- use of our senses to bring story to life!😊 ..and the words you used 'magic' the right word's can add that zest spark and flavour to the mood envoking realism 😊
Your enthusiasm, use of creating the vision by using your hands. I could visualise your words- the clothes, hat... Your voice changed into the character. Learn't so much. Lovely 😊 xx Thank you"